Tuesday, February 9, 2010

"I Am Blanking Out On A Title For This Post "

Dear Blogging People: How are you?
By the way, does anyone else have trouble finding ways to open up a post? I do not seem quite able to master the art of an enthralling first word. Maybe if I started out something like, "It was a dark and stormy night..." and the rest would soon follow, "and Rachel sat typing at the keyboard." Not gonna cut it is it? Here is something that you will soon hear about if you talk with me about poetry: I do not in any way, shape or form like un-rhyming poetry. (generally.) That being said, I shall post a couple of poems that Sarah and I made up simply to disgust ourselves by pretending to be Mr. Carl Sandburg who is characterized by calling fog "cat feet" and all a manner of other things strange:

"The jaguar moves on silent feet-
Velvety feet through the jungle.
Where is he going?
Only he knows.
On velvet feet he steps across a log--
A dead, moss-covered log.
Startling a bird
He pauses- velvet
Paw held in the air.
Dark mists hide
Him
Where is he going?
Only his velvet feet know."

Now, if that weren't disgusting enough, here's one more:

"Drifting in endless columns
From the
Chimney where it came,
Choking columns float toward the sun,
Like a form of night,
Paled by the sun.
Gray smoke cloaks the
Lone pine from
My watching eyes.
I think- what is
Smoke?
A nightmare in
cloud-form?
A rain-cloud gone
Astray or perhaps
Just the cloud rising from
The logs on the
Hearth. I wonder, and
Watch the lone pine
Disappear in the
Smoke."

Okay. Bear with me. We were laughing so hard because people get famous from writing stuff like that. Who can call such things poetry? I am incredulous at some of those sorts of things. They are the most boring scribblings in the world I think. Here is a rhyming poem that I wrote about the subject:

"Analogies"
Like a truffle without chocolate
Like an apple without peel,
Like a mouth without a smile
Like a letter without seal,
Like a ring without a diamond
Like a watch without the time,
Like a fountain without water
Is a poem without rhyme.
Okay. And just for you Joanna, (and someone better comment or I'll never post poetry again) here is the one about our forest in the snow:
"Snow Lace"
The finest kind of lace I know
Is what the trees wear in the snow:
Their barren arms are covered quite
With snowy lace of dazzling white,
And glad I am to finally see
Them traced in silver-filigree.
The trimming on a wedding dress
May never fail you to impress.
And yet, a costly bridal veil
Beside the snow is coarse and pale.
More shimm'ring than the milk-weed down
Can be the greenwood's marriage gown--
And lo, the roots are even shod
In lace spun by Almighty God.
Okay. Hope you enjoyed that someone. And please believe me when I say that Sarah and I do not think the first two poems were good! They are impeccably revolting! :) -Rachel

7 comments:

  1. Ok. You asked for someone to comment, and so hear I am commenting on your poetry. I will say though, you may want to check the spelling on that last poem:) "Lime an apple without peel..." :) I do agree that poetry without rhymes is a bit weird if I may.
    See ya on Friday!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Your all-to-excited cousin,

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  2. "Analogies" is great! I really, really like it! It made me smile. "Snow Lace" is beautiful. You definitely need to post poetry more often. :)

    Yeah, I always spend the most time over the opening of a blog post. I usually spend 30 minutes starting it and then 10 minutes writing it. Or something like that. :P

    As a general rule, I don't like un-rhyming poems either. It's cheating! :) But sometimes, if someone is really good, they craft the words in such a way that there is a pulse and throb to the lines, and they fit together in such a way that you don't even realize it's not rhyming. I do admire that kind of poem.

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  3. Ah, poetry. It's so accomodating to one's mood. My sister and I had to study a lot of it the last couple months, and loved to laugh at whackos like e.e. cummings. Some of the stuff was hard to... um... decipher.

    When I write posts, I usually end up changing the title and opening paragraph. It's just that I start one place and end up somewhere completely different. It's a lot easier to begin a post when you know where it's going (and usually I don't until I'm finished).

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  4. I loved both your peoms, Racel, they were really good. I agree about unrhyming poetry- it does seem kind of pointless, doesn't it?

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  5. Hey you all! Rach and I did this Jane Austen heirone quiz and she was Anne Eliot the first time and Elinor Dashwood, and I was Elizabeth Bennet. Here's the link for it: http://www.strangegirl.com/emma/quiz.php

    (you may have to cut and paste!:)
    -Sarah

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  6. I too hate non-rhyming poems, but I think the others are lovely! -Kendal

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  7. Hello to "my girls"! Rachel, thanks for the poem. I am honored m'dear! It was lovely, as always!

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